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I have a good friend.He is so shy, but he always tells some jokes to make me happiness,So I am proud of him. He often plays games in the home.In fact,He thought that it is interest. Whatever, He very friendly with other.So He has a lot of friends .I remember his say, "Someday,I will success famous around the world."