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My friends have many difference ideas. For Tina. She is going to Beijing with her family ang she'll go to see the Great Wall and other beautiful sights in Beijing such as Tian'anmen square. How lucky she is! Jim says he will just stay at home most of time for study. Because he is too tired and he wants to have a good rest. How about I? Oh dear. I am the most tirrible peson, my mom told me I must have many cless. Dear me!