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No one could have failed to notice the fact that internet have big impact on interpersonal communication.An increasing number of individuals prefer to communicate through the internet.As a result,the impact of the internet on interpersonal communication calls for colse attention of the whole society. There are some individuals arguing that the impact is of great significance benefit.In their eyes,without internet,it is impossible for individuals to contact other at once.Even so,others hold a different view that impact carry some risk.Firstly, many teengers over indulgence in communicate on internet,it leads to they weaken abilityof interpersonal communicate face to face.What's more,communicate on internet is convenient and swift,but it's will be tricked easily,exert negative effect on social. As far as I concerned,only can we use the internet to communicate other moderate,the good impact of it will far out wight the bad.
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