拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意个别句子错误;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
It's a universal phenomenon that many people shopping on the Internet. Specially recent years, with door-to-door delivery has boomed,online shopping became more and more fashion. Online shopping has many advantages.Firstly,people can select a thing from different stores,even it hardly see in our daily life. Secondly,we just need a computer to buy thing which we want. But online shopping also has many disadvantages.On the one hand,many costumers may meet cheats and loss their money.On the other hand,a large amount of people specially women are addicted in online shopping,they spend too many time and money on shopping. As a college student,I think online shopping is great.On the personnel lever,we should to be a reasonable costumer.We need care about our property and protect our right from illegal tread.On the store level,the retails have good attitude and have good reputation.