小学一年级英语作文:Good friend

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Hello, this is my picture. She is my friend who wear red coat. She has a long black hair and black eyes.She has a small nose and small mouse. She is live in shenzhen city,with her father and her mother.She is a happy girl.We always can hear laugh from her.She has lots of friend.