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With development of society,people get information more efficient and quick.We can learn at home in front of computer instead of going to school.Lots of business trades were complished on the internet every day. All above are distributed to the widly use of internet. But some of you may have a question:is the internet always bring us advantages?Abviously, The answer is no.Just as every coin has two sides.Internet also brings us bad effects.There are many heckers on the internet who will heck into your computers,stole your privite information.what's worse,after stole your informations,those heckers using them to commit crime.That will cause damages. In my point of view,we should take good use of internet.Don't let the internet take place of interpersonal communication.
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