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内容：本人在12月15日到22日在纽约举行的展览会期间了解到贵公司产品号为5670的新产品，非常感兴趣，请贵方发给我们一份价格单和说明书。感谢贵方的合作，希望我们可以建立贸易关系。
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1．price list and instruction价格单和说明书
2．establish business relationship建立贸易关系
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From:hubin@163.com Date:Dec.7 2013 To:KPOHsales@hotmail.com Subject:To establish business relationship Dear Sir and Madam I knew you the new production No.5670 during the exhibition center held in New York on Dec 15th to Dec 22rd.And I am very quite interested in it.Please send us to a price list and an instruction.We are excepting to establish business relationship with you We are looking forward to your reply as soon as possible Yours sincerely Hu Bin
