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Dear Mary Hi,dear! Congratulate you on birthday. Now, you are bigger than life past. But I am sorry for you because I can't play a part on your birthday party. First. I am going to have a Chinese lesson, I can't ask for leave because I just do that. Then, I have to help my mother for the housework. My mother says I must do that, at the end. I can go, but if I go to your party. It'll late. Last, I must do my homework. If I don't do that. my teacher'll called me! So,excuse that. You know, I really want to go! Yours, Lucy
