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Each partents love their children,they hope their children can grow up with any difficulties,and enjoy a happly life.So they help their children decide everything.Parents help children choose what to learn ingore children's intrest.Some parents even help children wash clothes until they were 18 years old. Children will be leave thier parents anyway,and live with theirself.Some children can't do anything when leave their parents,such as washing or cooking.All this due to thier parents didn't help their children independent. There is no doubt that enough concren must be paid to this problem.As far as my concren,all parents should help children to be independent.They should let thier children wash their own clothes.Sometimes children should make their mind by theirself.Only in this way they can turely independent.