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Nowadays,it's easy to discover that lots of parents have arranged almost everything for their children so that they will not need to worry about anything and be more concentrated on their study.As we all know,Chinese parents always long to help their children solve the problems their children meet for the reason that parents don't want their kids to suffer pains.Actually,it is pains that make us kids grow strongly. It's essential for children to become independent because it's impossible for parents to be with us forever.Not only should parents raise their kids' awareness of being independent,but also adults have to take actions.For example,children should be taught how to do housework and deal with the obstacles by their own.