文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;句式变化较为明显,可适当增加从句的使用;作者词汇表达比较多样,也能较好的使用一些学术词汇。
Parents help children do anything has been playing an increasingly important role in our daily life,it has brought a lot of benefits but has created some serious problems as well. A lot of people,especially the young people who are lack of self-control,are easily addicted to the game,which will result in their don't go class or rest.However, parents can help us to spend time reasonably.But other people set forth completely totly different argument concerning this case.They claim that the children will lact of communication with their classmate,if the parents help children much. As far as I am concerned,I am in claim to be on the side of the latter view.I think the parents can support us at moment,but they can't help us forever,so we must become indepent.