拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;如若增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;上下文衔接稍显不流畅。
How many people would succeed in the same class?And why dose so difference in the same class?The same teachers and same education ways that some students fail to go university,but others gain good achievement.Why are they fortune so distinct.Some of them would be succeed because of they never give up,they have the strong will.That's the important guarantee of successful. And then,the finish of great mission that person of the strong will could to do it.No matter ancient or today,in spite of international or home,all can't do it without the strong will. The same with us,as a student that eventually become a talent if no study hard.