2011年6月英语四级作文真题:网上购物

恰当的使用了过渡词和衔接词，衔接手法做的很棒；适当增加一些从句的使用，会为文章添彩；文章用了较为丰富的词汇，学术词汇略显单薄，同时注意单词拼写的检查。

Online shopping has been play an increasingly important role in our daily life,it has brought a lot of benefits has created some serious problems as well. A lot of people especially the young people who are lack of self-control,are easily addicted to online shopping,which will result in their wasting time and buying endurable things.However,there are large number of people who hold a different view concerning this case.They claim online shopping is convience,and we could burgent to the shop of internet.This ways can save some money. As far as i am concerned,i am inclimed to be on the side of the latter view.Because of I always shopping in internet.we can shopping at home,and buy some cheaping things.