2012年12月英语六级作文真题(II):人与电脑

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with the enocomy developing ,tecnologys have a great change ,and computer play an more and more inmpotant role in our life ,we can read online, play games online ,get informations what we need from computer ,surf on internet,you can see, human can't leave computer. however ,everything has two sides ,we are very conviniet with computer ,it also bring us something bad ,for example lots of young children surf on the internet all day ,