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On Excessive Packaging As the time goes on,more and more different kinds of products have been sold on different places like supermarkets,stores and the Internet.As a consumer,I am easy to be attracted by the products with more beautiful packaging.The spring festival will soon come,I am prepared some gifts for families and friends.So it is time for shopping.The more pretty a product looks ,the more attention it will get .That is why products have been on excessive packaging all the time.But this situation also brings some negative things like more and more consumers feel they have been cheated by those beautiful look cause the thing inside the packaging is not that good at all.It comes out that people are losing faith in goods.In the end,it will badly affected the economy.