拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;上下文衔接稍显不流畅。
How many people would succeed in the same class?And why are so difference in the same class?The same teachers and same education ways that some students fail to go university,but others gain good achievement.Why are they fortune so distinct.Just because some of they never give up,they have the strong will.That's what the important guarantee of successful. And then,the finish of great mission that person of the strong will could to do it.No matter ancient or today,in spite of international or home,all can't do it without the strong will. The same with us,as a student that eventually become a talent if no study hard.