单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累;连词使用偏少;请注意分段。
I have a good friend, she is an extremely beautiful and happy girl. She is quite tall and slim. She has long, curly and brown hair,she has a red mouth,she has big ears,she has a straight nose and narrow eyes. She likes reading books, shopping and listening to music. She is pretty charming and helpful.Sometime, she's a little quiet and we're always playing tennis on the weekends.