简单句比重稍微偏高,注意个别句子错误;行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用;文中用词稍显贫乏,同时请注意单词拼写的检查;请提高文章内敛性,段落和句子要围绕主题展开。
As we all know that a lot of people like to watch cctv's spring party . because it give our a lot of happiness .It is ont ony is a happiness party ,but also a habbit of chinese common people. However, There are other people think that our governoment should withdraw the spring party. There are some reasons that they concerned .First,less and less people whatch the spring party.and,the spring party waste a lot of money.Therefore,they think spring party is unnecessary on today. As far as my concened,spring party is a great memory for our common people.I'm sure that if we can give a chance to spring party,our spring party will more wonderful.