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From wanghaiyang@hotmail.com To sales-department@hotmail.com Dear Mr.Johnson: We have already recieved three thousand products from your company on 22th,Dec.But according to our signing of the No.35 order,we shoule recieve the product of 3500,the other 500 products we have not recieved.Please check your product list.And we are looking forward to your replay!