作者能较熟练地使用词汇表达,一些学术词汇的使用也比较灵活;文章中的过程性词汇比较丰富;可适当增加几条从句。
As it is known to us all,we students spend lots of time surfing the Internet such as playing computer games or shopping online,which has definitely brought us a large amount of convenience. However,different people hold various opinions on the Internet.On the one hand,some believe that it is the Internet that can help make our study and work more efficient for the reason that it is pretty available for us to get help from the Internet.On the other hand,other pessimistically think that not only will teenagers be addicted to the Internet,which influences students' study in a bad aspect,but also their health can be seriously affected. When it comes to my ideas,I firmly believe that we have to treat the Internet in a correct attitude.For example,we can use it as a way of relaxing but it shouldn't be a provider of answers.With a healthy attitude,the Internet can benefit us a lot.