Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词;从句使用稍显不足,注意个别句子错误;文章用了较为丰富的词汇,学术词汇略显单薄,同时注意单词拼写的检查。
From the chart,we could get a message about the weekly earnings in 2010.This chart implys the higher education can offer the higher income.Who is gets the doctoral degree could get the highest income-$1551,secondly is master's degree-$1272, and the lowest income-$444,which is the less than a high school diploma. As well as we know,the society has rapid development at present day,more and more high educated worekers are needed,such as the people who gots the doctoral degree,master's degree and bachelor's degree.The blue workers are not necessary in the developed countries,so a man oughts to have the high education only a high school diplima. Broading speaking, nowadays, everyone should get the high education and achieve more knowledges.