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As the devloping of our ecnomic,compitions become fircer and fircer. under such stress, people will be more tend to getting some illness, like mental problem. It is important to keep a good mood. the fllowings are my resons. Firstly, accroding to many researches, those people who are easy to be annoyed or always get angery have great posibility to get pysical illness, even get dease. Have you find that when we go to hospital, more the doctor said you must keep a good mood, angry is not good for your health. Then on anther hand, keeping a good mood can help you get along well with others. in your life, you must work or study with someone together. But i don not think so that someone will like those men who are easy annoyed. do you like it, i do not like. If you want to keep a good relationship with others, keeping a good mood is necessary. Last,based on some scien survey, man who is in good mood would do more better in work than this guy who is in angry mood. good mood can help people speed up our working proficeny. with a good mood, we can deal with our business more qucikly. In a conclusion, keeping a good mood can make our life more happy.
