2011年6月英语四级作文真题:网上购物

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My views on Online Shopping Today,Online Shopping is been fashion for all persons.Why is the Online Shopping going to been fashion? Because Online Shopping is more easier for us to buy some commodities like clothes，shoes,mobile phone,etc.It makes us buy anything which we like at home,and makes us can buy more and more types of commodities. But,when we buy a commodities,for example,we buy a skirt that we can't assure quality of the skirt .I have one Online Shopping experience. In the middle school ,one days,I want to buy a mobile phone.My friend suggest that I buy the phone from TaoBao which a fashion Online Shopping patio.I accept his advice.But,when I receive for the mobile phone,I fining this phone is a prate phone,it hurt my heart.So,I haven't buy anything from TaoBao. It only my experience,but I suggest for you who are wanting to buy the commodities for Online Shopping,having to look before you leap.