2011年6月英语四级作文真题:网上购物

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Today,Online Shopping has been popular in people.Why the Online Shopping has been fashion? Because Online Shopping is easier for us to buy some commodities like clothes，shoes,mobile phone,etc.It makes us buy anything which we like at home,and makes us can buy more and more types of commodities. But,when we buy a commodity,for example,we buy a skirt that we can't assure the skirt quality.I have an experience from the Online Shoppoing. In the middle school,one days,I want to buy a mobile phone.My friend suggests that I buy the phone from TaoBao which a fashion patio of Online shopping.I accept his advice.But,when I have received for the mobile phone,I fining this phone is a prate phone,it hurt my heart.So,I haven't bought anything from TaoBao. It only my experience,but I suggest for you who are wanting to buy the commodities for Online Shopping,having to look before you leap.