建议增加衔接词和过渡词的使用;简单句比重稍微偏高,注意文中的句子错误;作者能较熟练地使用一定的学术词汇,但文中拼写错误稍多;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
In recent years,a significant number of students do not look forward to speaken.So,many words are forgot,and the English as a langerage,words are important.As me, I want to say to ereryone that speaken are important. Making this phenomenon,it is the computer was bothed.In internet,has too many speaken pregrom,it can help peolit to seaken.It is so early.Everyone know,no one can deny that ,if can early ,no one wil chance the different one,