Source: Bureau of Labor Statistics, Current Population Survey.
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As the saying goes:learning is our life.with the fastly develop of society,education is more and more inportant for us. form the staustas we can make a conclusion,The higher education you are,the more salary you can make.otherwise,what the higher money they have ,they hardly unemployment are.so many person thinks:education is meas money. In my opinion,I don't think so, To show one person valure,education is not the one.in the society which we living,we can do much thing what we think were valuable.for example,if you like plant the flowers,you can plant it to sell,it can make money too,you can be a teacher a boss, a layer and so on. In the and,education pays will play a role fluent in our life,but we should try our best to leaning it.