拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
How many people would succeed in the same class?And why are so difference in the same class?The same teachers and the same teaching method that some students fail to go to university,but others gain good achievement.Why are they fortune so distinct.Just because some of they never give up,they have the strong will.That's what the important guarantee of successful. And then,the finish of great mission that person of the strong will could to do it.No matter ancient or today,in spite of international or home,all can't do it without the strong will. The same with us,as a student that eventually never become a talent if no study hard.We have to insist in our dream and finish it one day.Insist on doing something maybe fail,but if we do not insist that must fail.