拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;如若增加一些长难句的使用,会为文章添彩;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Along with the advance of society more and more problems are brought to our attention. One of which is certificate craze. There is no consensus of opinions among people as to certificate craze.Some people tend to have favorable attitude toward it.They believe the more certificates people have,the more opportunities people would get.While,others have an unpleasant association with it.they hold the view that it is a waste of time to get some unnecessary certificates,we should spend time in things what we should do. I take the attitude that,we need understand what we want instead of getting certificates blindly.It is not wise to follow the majority of people to get something you need not.