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recently,more parents tend to shelter their children for almost everything.So,how should parents help children to be independent is still a problem that parents needs to face up to.To make their children become confident in their life and study,they can always give a messenge to their children that they will not account for their future.This may be difficult sometimes,but the benefits will soon come up.You will find that your children become more diligent in their carer or study.And your will soon find that you even do not need to make things for them.They can even refuse your help.Anyway,no matter how we treat our children,we should be responsible for teaching them to have a healthy mood and good learning habits.In conclusion,all we have are 24 hours a day,and we should waste none of them to lead our children.That is what we can do.