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My best friend now study in Hainan University,and she studies very hard there.We were friends when we were junior school students.We sit next to each other,and always go home together after school.Although we two now study in different cities,we still think about each other.When I feel sad,I would call her,also,when she has a boyfriend,I am the first one she tells.A good friend is a priceless wealth that I will value forever.