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Dear headmaster, I had been university for over a year,and now,I have to write this letter for you which is concern the situation about the Canteen Service on Campus. On the one hand,there is no denying the fact that the canteen on campus bring a large convenience for our students,for its reassuring cooking and Convenient geographic location. But on the other hand,the canteen's meal not only bad but expensive.And sometimes we must line for a long time but finally we get nothing to eat. Moreover,the customer was also not very fine.I always see someone go leaving the garbage which causing sometimes I can't find the clean desk to enjoy my lunch. But I have to prise the serve of the canteen,they were too friendly and always makes me happy. Yours LiMing
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