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I used to live in a beautiful small town with green trees all around it.The rever which is through the town is very clean that fish can be seen swimming in it. The strees are not wide for driving a car, in sides of streets, all houses seem older and simple. People work harldly all years, but they still can not have goten food enough for eating . Now, moden building are in side of streets, factories and shopping mall are all over in there. different size cars are running the streets. The enviroment is getting worse due to the industral developments fast. a lot of trees gone and disappeared fish groups means the pollution shoud be treated .