文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但学术词汇表达还需要很大提升;文中从句使用不丰富,要注意个别句子错误;文章结构不够严谨,应增加过程性词汇的使用。
Nowadays,with the development of electrical network and high-technology,internet become more popular in our diary life. On one side,internet bring us great convenience and strengthen the communication between people.We can do the shopping,reading,playing games or even working just with the help of internet.What's more,we can communicate with our friends through qq, msn, skype or other chatting tools to share interesting things or ask for relative help. However,every coin has two sides,some people trust internet blindly and relay on it so much which largely cause trust crisis and network crime. Some children even be addicted to international games and abandon their studies. In summary,we should take right attitude towards internet based on its two sides impacts.
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