文中应增加从句和复合句的使用;文中较熟练地使用学术词汇,但词汇量仍需积累;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
Nowadays,with the development of electrical network and high-technology,internet impact our lives every day. On one side,internet bring us great convenience and strengthen the communication between people.We can do the shopping,reading,playing games or even working just with the help of the internet.What's more,we can communicate with our friends through qq, msn, skype or other chat tools to share interesting things or obtain help. But every coin has two sides,some people believe internet blindly and relay on it so much which largely cause trust crisis and cybe crime. Some children are addicted to international games and abandon their studies. In summary,we should take right attitude towards internet based on its two sides impacts.
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