文章结构清晰,有效地采用了多种衔接方法;丰富从句的使用,文章会更出色;作者能较灵活准确地使用词汇表达,但学术词汇的积累还有很大的空间。
Now, some people craze on the certificate. The goals of that include about 1、To strength one's professional ability that they can study and work well. 2、To use their free time and make their life full, then, when they get old, they shouldn't feel blue because of wasting time. 3、To have a shortcut to get their prefer job and live their love life and e.c., above of all, in my opinion, I agree with the certificate examination, when we are young, we need to study save our times, at this part, the certificate exam is obviously good methods, It can teach young people not to waste time on computer games or other meaningless things, and in the long course, we can learn firm and steady spirit to get the certificate. someone like the progress of exam, they can learn the valued knowledge to use in their remainder life, they can benefit from it which is the most important parts with which I support certificate exam. At the same time, someone who get certificate is only for profit, their certificate was used in some corporation but themselves does not work for it, and the corporation get the certificates for their qualification and pay the owner some money. I don't agree with them in these parts, I think it will creat confusion for professional environment.