采用了简单的衔接手法,行文流畅;熟练的使用了从句和复杂句;作者词汇表达不够多样,希望能多使用学术词汇;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
My hometown was a beautiful village in the past, the tree was surrounded in the street;the fish were play in the river;villager lived in poor house and narrow road;people work very hard but life was poor. Now:you can see High-rise buildings and various kinds store everywhere ; the size of the car was driveing by people in the streets;industry develop made the environment degradation and trees was cut down year by year,fish less and less;so, the point of development is control pollution.