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My hometown was a beautiful village in the past.The tree was surrounded in the street and the fish were play in the river.Villager lived in poor house and narrow road,people work very hard but life was poor. Ten years later you can see High-rise buildings and various kinds store everywhere.The man driving the size of the car in the streets.Industrail developments while environment degradation and trees was cut down year by year,fish less and less,so, the first thing is solve environmental problems.