采用了恰当的衔接手法,层次清晰;可适当增加从句的使用;拼写方面做得很棒,平时练习中注意词汇量的积累。
There is no denying that it is pretty inevitable and essential for us students to select our majors for the reason that no matter which major we choose,it will seriously affect our jobs in the future.As for me,I strongly suggest that what we select should base on our interest.However,what I recommend is Journalism because not only are we surrounded by a sea of news,but also we should take our responsibility to reveal the truth behind those affairs. If choosing this profession,not only should you have already attained good writing ability,but also you will need a camera to record the whole process.Most importantly, manifesting the truth is what you should always bear in mind. If you are dying for this major,first of all,you will have to improve your ability to write.For example,daily writing will be of great benefit.What's more,only when you have absorbed how to edit a piece of news will you be able to be an outstanding reporter.Last but not least,remember that reputation and fortune should never be the reason that why you counterfeit the news.