拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;语句间的衔接成分用的不错,同时文章中的过程性词汇很丰富;丰富从句的使用,文章会更出色;请注意分段。
There is no doubt that a sea of dishonest phenomenons have existed in the society and accordingly we will need to improve our ability of judgement.For instance,businessmen cheat others for profits;husbands cheat their wives;students cheat in the exams for high marks,etc.It is dramatically inevitable for everyone to bear in mind that honesty is the best quality. As a consequence,everyone of us should be an honest man for the reason that being honest will be of great benefit not only for us but also for everybody.When honest,you will win others' trust and friendship as a repay.I have ever heard such sentence:you will need to make up more lies in order to cover up your first little lie.