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Recently,people who have cars are increasingly 。And my idea is thai more and more cars can make the life convenient , such as it will be comforteble to travel and it is more safe than bike.But as we all known,the more cars bring more pollution,jarns and more traffic accident.As far as I am concerned, the gavernment need control the number of cars,only in this way can we have a nicer life.