希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;句法很棒,若适当增加一些从句的使用,文章会取得更好的成绩;文章结构不错,使用了丰富的衔接词和过渡词。
Recently,people who have cars are increasing. And my idea is thai more and more cars can make life more convenient,such as it will be comfortable to travel and it is more safe than bike. But as we all known,the more cars bring more pollution,jeans and many traffic accidents.As far as I am concerned, the government need control the number of cars,only in this way can we have a nicer life.