2011年6月英语四级作文真题:网上购物

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Nowadays many people select Online shopping.it must become a hot way to buy things. On the one hand,Online shopping can save time,And in the Online where you have more type,you can find every things in the Online,even whloe the world.on the another hand,Online shopping is not safe, maybe lose your indent or personal information .it's too dangerous.And on Online shopping that you can not see the ture things . In my opiono,Online shoping is very convenient,