词汇表达不够丰富,要增加学术词汇的使用;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;语言不流畅;连词使用偏少。
I have a good friend. He is a handsome boy. He has a short black fair, two big ears, and a small mouth. He likes reading science fiction and he is good at playing basketball and football. He likes playing computer games and chess. His grade is so excellent that we all admire him. His favorite subject is Chinese and his composition is very good. He is going to write a book of science fiction.