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小学一年级英语作文:My New Teacher

发布时间:2013-05-15 11:32浏览次数:7151
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描述我的新老师。
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Our English teacher is a new man in here. He is an older man and he wears a couple of red glasses. He has a yellow short fair cover his head top, and his hair likes a bird's nest. He is kindness for us so we like him very much. Our new teacher has a couple of big ears and two black eyes, a small mouth. He likes playing football and basketball. Besides,he often reading and play computer games, and he is good at playing chess, so he often share his experience with his students.

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