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Our English teacher is a new man here. He is an older man and he often wear a pair of glasses with red. He has a bingle with yellow on the top of his head, and his hair likes a bird's nest. He is kindness for us so we like him very much. Our new teacher has a couple of big ears and two black eyes, a small mouth. He likes playing football and basketball. Besides,he often read and play computer games, and he is good at playing chess, so he often share his experience with his students.