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My favorite spoirt My favorite sport is playing football.It is a chance by accdient that i fell love with football.One day on my ways to home,i picket out a football.Then,i play it together with my friends,from that time, i deeply love to play football.therefore,i often practive it and join in the match with my classmates.What is more, beike is my favorite foot star.so i am dreaming of being a professional football player.