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My name is Li Hua.I am a senior high school coming from Guangzhou city. As a number of 90-posts,I have to admit that I am not independent.I really depend on my parent or friends.They often told me that I should try to do somthing by myself.But I am afriad of loneliness,because of which,I am lack of confidence gradually. As time go by,It seems that I live in my world.My heart is shocked.How dangerous is.No I have to break away this life.So I want to apply for the job.Althogh the job is without any reward,but I believe that I will gain a valuable experience.In my opinion,only when I go through this experience,can I realize the importance of the independent.
