小学一年级英语作文:Jim's family

正确句子比例很高，但需多多加强从句的使用；文中用词稍显贫乏，单词拼写还要加强；连接词过少，建议增加衔接词汇的积累；请注意分段；连词使用偏少；可以适当增加副词的使用。

A picture is on my desk. This is a picture of Jim's family. The man is Jim's father. A woman is behind Jim. She is his mother. They are teachers. A girl is in the picture, too. She is Jim's sister. Her name is Kate Green. Jim and his sister are in the same school. we are englishpersons!