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Date :Dec.23th,2008 Dear Mary Chen, Because I have to take a trip to Beijing for a week tomorrow,I can not discuss with you about the company party of Yuan Dan.It is time for you to do it, so please inform everyone the finall discission time and place,and getting praparation!Thank you! Li Ming