2011年12月英语四级作文真题:坚强的意志

文中如若增加一些长难句的使用，会为文章添彩；词汇表达较灵活准确，学术词汇使用过少，另外注意文中个别的拼写错误；文章层次不够分明，缺少组织，需注意文章整体的组织结构；可以适当增加副词的使用。

As we all know,everyone wants to be succeeded.In my view, nothing succeeds without a strong will ! Everyman wants to be a superman and everywoman wants to be a superwoman.But in the world,some people are not money,they are poor and some people are rich,such as Bill Gates.So it tell us that a strong will is the promise of the succeeds. The person who have a strong will can finish the great mission.Those person have dreams and they would do the work on matter what diffcults have in their lives. We students aslo need have a strong will.If we don't study hard,we will know nothing and can't do what we want to do .